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18th Jan 2021, 1:54 PM in Iron Man Is Rolled!
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Maltor 18th Jan 2021, 1:54 PM edit delete
Here it is! The first page of Earth's Diciest Heroes! This is a comic that I've been planning for a very long time, and I'm very excited to finally be starting it.

This is my first comic, so I'm figuring some stuff out. Please let me know if you think the readability can be improved in any way.
Maltor 22nd Jan 2021, 12:30 PM edit delete
In retrospect, I kind of have some issue with the dialogue on this page. It's functional, it's in character, but... well, it's a little off. First off, it's a little OOC for Gemma to have forgotten she left the door open. Not a huge deal, except that this is your first impression of her. Second, she probably wouldn't have minis just for Hydra goons. They'd probably be using green MnMs or lego blocks or something. Finally, I don't think Rory would automatically assume Blaine was playing too. This is the kind of group where people duck in and out a lot depending on availability. Let's just say they've spoken about this game to each other beforehand.

I'm going to try and avoid making edits to anything that's already been posted - I personally don't like it when webcomics do that. Just let this be a lesson not to script your comics after 1 am, or at least don't post immediately so you can come back to it with fresh eyes in the morning.

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Archer Xanthorg 21st Jan 2021, 3:56 PM edit delete reply
Archer Xanthorg
It looks pretty good so far.
Rus 21st Jan 2021, 4:57 PM edit delete reply
Rus
Art style here is amazing! And,, is that a nonbinary charcter I see mentioned? :) ANyway, very excited for the next page!
Maltor 22nd Jan 2021, 12:06 PM edit delete reply
To be clear, this is a campaign comic, like Darths and Droids, DM of the Rings, and others of its ilk, so it's not my art. But I really do love the art style of this show, it does a great job of capturing the feel of the comics!

And yes, Blaine's pronouns are they/them.
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